we was going hunting so i put on a discise so the pigs wont tell if im human or not when it was all over i washed up and and went to my covert plase whare the tendills are it seemed like there was a infinate amoutnt of tendrlls hanging from the rock I raped up in to a ball and and i started to snivel a little bit and then i felt asleep the next day i discided to hunt in the low part of the forest i saw a pig mom so i was ready to kill so i held my speare compromisingly but then i thought if i kill it and that is the only woman pig i will mess up the food chain in a way. i went to the huts so i could tell ralph they we should go to the top of the moutain in the day light and see what that really was up there becuse i do not belive that that we a beast by the time i got up by the huts i forgot what i was going the tell ralph so i said somthing sagley so he wouldnt think that i was crazy but he looked influriating so i walked away and i looked like i just made a blunder i went to my secreat place again and fell asleep
Thursday, February 28, 2008
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Are you sure your talking about the right chapter and I think this is from the wrong persons perspective it is supposed to be roger talking not simon and there are alot of spelling mistakes
I think this is from simons prespective rather than rogers or t might just be the wrong number, so you might want to check on that. It looked like you used most of the words right. There was a few misspelled words like.
we was(first sentence) intead of We were
most of the i's are lower case
discise?
place and where on the first sentence
a few run on sentences
maybe make it a bit longer
spear and a few others but besides that it was good.
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